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Old 12-31-2006, 08:57 PM
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please be rough...

Im interested to know if this composition makes sense. From a conceptual nand technical stand points.

This is the before:

And this is the after:

Please nip pick away at it...

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Old 01-01-2007, 07:50 AM
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Re: please be rough...

WishfulPixel, nice work.

Yes, there does seem to be some problem in the composition. It takes a while to latch on to the little guys. Probably because the eye gets drawn in other directions - leading away from them.

The insertion of the pipe is very well executed (i.e. look as if it were there from the start). The only slight nitpick would be that it seems to be angled slightly upward - which doesn't fit in with the water (? ) flowing out of it.

The little guy, bottom left, seems a little strange. I'm not too well aquainted with frog's front legs - just seems slightly off.
Also there is something near his "backside" - maybe a remnant of the original scene's cut-out?

As to the scale, unless the guy in the pipe is the "big daddy" frog, then something is awry with the perspective. He's a lot bigger than the others.

Like I said, nice work - I'm just nitpicking.

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Old 01-01-2007, 08:20 AM
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Re: please be rough...

Thanks for the quick reply and nit picking. I love that everyone on this site looks for this type of thing!

The first frog is supposed to be big daddy frog so that works, he's also the main focal point here and the other 2 are there as an after thought to add a sense of community.

I fixed the back leg and took some of the lighting off both secondary frogs. the second frog doesnt look like theres a mini spot light on him nearly as much.

As far as the drain goes, if I swing the water to match the perspective of the vertical seams on the back wall. then in sits directly over that shadow. I already shortened the pipe originally, and would prefer not to shorten it again. Maybe Im looking at it wrong? What do you think?

Thanks for the help again.

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