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Old 06-16-2008, 09:03 AM
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Feedback on Montage

I'm Looking for feedback on this image. it's a montage of a cemetary shot. The model was shot separately in front of a green screen. My goal was to simulate a movie poster or DVD cover. This is just the artwork, no layout or text. The Crop is off due to size constraints and I'm only looking for thoughts on the composite work.

Good, Bad, Horrible?

Just let me know.

Thanks,
Jimi
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Old 06-16-2008, 11:38 AM
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Re: Feedback on Montage

I think it's a very effective image so far. The one thing you might consider is the lighting on the person. Since there is a strong source of light coming from the rear, there should be edge light on the shoulders and head.
Good job otherwise.
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Old 06-16-2008, 11:40 AM
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Re: Feedback on Montage

I wouldn't say that it is horrible. It's a good place to start. You did a good job of fitting the actress into your scene. When adding elements to a scene, it is important that they be placed in the scene so they interact with the elements of the scene. You have done a very good job with that with the way the girl appears to be climbing out of the hole in the ground.

The scene as a whole seems to be a bit too dark. You have a bright light source, the lightning bolt, which would throw a lot of light. Also, with the lightning strike, the shadows and lighting are all off. You don't have any shadows being cast by the source of light. The tombstones in front and the girl's face all seem to be lit from the front. They should be lit more from behind. The tombstones close to the light are darker than the ones farther away. Also, I think it is a bit too blue, but that is subjective.
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Old 06-16-2008, 08:27 PM
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Re: Feedback on Montage

Very nice.
I agree with the others on most points.
The light in the rear would appear to be a major element. However, the light it casts is strange in that it shines mostly on the ground... even with a little bending to follow the stone to the ground, etc. Oddly, it does not radiate any light on the other elements... on the left for instance. I don't think lighting those other elements would distract at all from the image or pull focus away from the girl. I think in this type scene we expect to see all sorts of detail... it's exciting. Unfortunately, when you can't see it.. it's not as exciting.
Thanks for posting this one !
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Old 06-16-2008, 11:16 PM
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Re: Feedback on Montage

Ditto all the above.. just offering a quick sample of their suggestions for comparison..

The eye seems to want to take in the whole scene now

Just a suggestion..

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Old 06-17-2008, 04:31 AM
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Re: Feedback on Montage

Concept is good but it needs work ,I think you got some good advice from the people above
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Old 06-17-2008, 06:27 AM
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Re: Feedback on Montage

I want to thank all of you for the insightful feedback. sometimes I get so wrapped up in the technical aspects I forget about the overall scene, or like in this case, I miss something very important. I'll be making adjustments and working on the image.

Thanks Again!

Jimi
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