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Old 11-24-2009, 04:34 AM
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Thumbs up Coca-Cola Creation

Hi, I did this creation about a new kind of Coke.
The Chocolate Coke, could you critic this whole creation please.

Critic only about the art thing, not about the taste chocolate ^^

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Old 11-27-2009, 11:03 AM
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Re: Coca-Cola Creation

Rsphotocreation,

I'm no expert by any means. But, here are my thoughts:

- good overall execution of the graphic elements;
- colors are a bit flat, not enough variation to make the browns interesting;
- a little lacking in what I would call "interest", "draw"... I'm just not sure what the connection is between the dancers and the new taste of chocolate.... could there be some other way of highlighting the product?
- there seems to be room to add more elements in the image without overdoing it... in other words, it's a bit empty. While that makes it a bit more classic, it may depend on what you were trying for... classic or contemporary. Maybe another version that is more appealing to the younger crowd would be helpful.
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Old 11-27-2009, 12:07 PM
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Re: Coca-Cola Creation

Thanks

The dancing girls are here in reference to the Chocolate, girls are more likely to like the chocolate's taste.

Then, there is empty space to follow the Coke design among their commercials:
http://2.bp.blogspot.com/_fja83pRFr1...+encounter.jpg
http://www.armslikenoodles.co.uk/images/coke.jpg

As you can see, in some parts it's very condensed and on others it's empty. I wanted to stay classic, and the aim was all the people.

Although, I was still working on it when I posted that, so I'll upload my job

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Old 12-19-2009, 09:12 AM
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Re: Coca-Cola Creation

I am not sure the entire image moves my eye through it like the real images from Coke do. I agree the browns fall flat, you need to mix it up a bit with different hues.
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Old 12-21-2009, 01:15 AM
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Re: Coca-Cola Creation

The thing with the coke images is that it usually says "welcome to the Coke side of life" or something like that. So, smaller bottle, no stuff around the bottle (just coming out the top of it, which is like their theme), and maybe change the line to: chocolate Coke. Coke here would be the logo on the bottle. The bottle also should be just an outline, not a filled in illustration. Also have a look at your kerning and spacing, I could drive a bunch of trucks through Nouveau......

GOod luck.
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Old 12-22-2009, 08:38 AM
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Re: Coca-Cola Creation

First thing that popped into my mind when I looked at it was how flat it seemed in terms of shadowing and dimensions. I would suggest trying more shadows and highlights, and also trying to layer elements so they 'intertwine' more three dimensionally, if that makes sense. Things seem to be piled on top of each other instead of flowing comfortably together.

Your outlines seem a bit harsh, around the bottle and dancer silhouettes.

The brushes or vectors you used are a bit overused in general, maybe try some other sets?

Perhaps the bottle might gain a bit from adding a glass like finish to it, and less brush work as well. It seems like with such an active background, that perhaps a really beautifully illustrated and minimalistic bottle may pop a bit more in the context of the entire piece.

Just a few things that popped into my mind, I'd love to see how you get along with it, especially the second one.
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Old 12-22-2009, 12:30 PM
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Re: Coca-Cola Creation

Products can't be sold to the public without the inclusion of girls.
Dancing or doing whatever. Sex sells but this falls flat as reported.
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Old 12-28-2009, 12:42 AM
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Re: Coca-Cola Creation

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I am not sure the entire image moves my eye through it like the real images from Coke do. I agree the browns fall flat, you need to mix it up a bit with different hues.
the brown looks slightly red alot of red in the brown?
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