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Old 03-29-2014, 01:20 PM
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One more retouch for your valuable feedback

Hi Guys!

Thanks for your valuable critic on my last retouch. It was very helpful. I expect the same from you on this one too. This retouch is 100% dodge and burn. Can't wait to know your views on this one Thanks in advance!

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Old 03-30-2014, 12:25 AM
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Re: One more retouch for your valuable feedback

Could you please let me retouch this image?
(If yes, I will post the result here.)

Thanks in advance!
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Old 03-30-2014, 03:07 AM
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Could you please let me retouch this image?
(If yes, I will post the result here.)

Thanks in advance!
Sure, the photographer has allowed this image to be retouched and use in your portfolio. Please just mention his name in the credits, just write "Stefan B". You can crop the original from my image or I can also send you the RAW. Thanks!
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Old 03-30-2014, 04:55 AM
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Re: One more retouch for your valuable feedback

The biggest part that bothers me is the hair. You tried to chop it with very inconsistent lines, then tried to paint in flyaways. If you're going to paint in hair, it has to match in scale, sharpness, and overall color/tone. It also can't be all one color. You may have to refine it. I'll leave methods for another post. They aren't important right now. It starts with recognition. The hair is kind of crazy. You're not going to get clean and flowing from this. If you want to chop it, it should be consistent. You should be able to view it and tell me it works, not have something that looks like an almost arbitrary line due to separation around the outer parts and a sudden halt. Once again don't repaint flyaways like that. It looks like you just took a one pixel brush and tried to trace along the hair at 100% sharpness with a solid color. That doesn't work for anyone. The scale, sharpness, and variations have to match what was there in the beginning if you want to do that.

I think you should put some work into two areas before really trying to conquer those smaller details. The first is better determining what the mood of the final will be regardless of what image. The second to me would be better understanding of facial structure. There are areas where the color and things could be vastly improved, but it bothers me more how you made the jaw line overly angular compared to the original and essentially raised the cheekbone. These larger sensibility issues are going to hold you back much more than the smaller detail stuff. Both are important, but I think sensibility you should start with the broader aspects. I can see those at any resolution better than the smoothness of skin.
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Old 03-30-2014, 07:06 AM
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Re: One more retouch for your valuable feedback

Could you please send the link of the raw file to my inbox?

Thank you!
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Old 03-31-2014, 12:25 AM
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Re: One more retouch for your valuable feedback

Thank you, suryapuranik!

Last edited by photophile; 03-31-2014 at 01:31 AM.
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Old 03-31-2014, 01:02 AM
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Re: One more retouch for your valuable feedback

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Hi Photophile!

I appreciate your work on the image, its really a great start. I'll be happy and also easier for you to read the reviews on your retouch if you put it in a new thread in the "Critiques" section. If you exclusively put it in a new thread, more people will see it and write their feedback. Thanks!
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