Hi John,
Welcome to
RP!
First of all great shot!!!
You also did a good job in correcting the problems you have pointed out!
Even though, it might be my monitor, but your correction looks a tad 'muddy/grey' to me ... You managed quite well to soften the highlights, but the shadows are, in my opinion, still very dark...
I don't have
PSE ... (I work with
PS CS), but I had a go at your picture only to show what I meant...
I used the Curves to lift the shadows only and Selective Colors to adjust the colours of your picture trying to maintain a warmer 'bronze' glow on the subject's skin ....