for a first retouch job, its definitely not bad.
in my opinion, the subjects have way to heavy of a glow. takes away the realism of the pic. if that was the loook you were going for, then its a great job because the whole picture has been altered, rather then just the face.
must of been tough playing with this picture considering the face is so blown out. my suggestions would be to tone down the glow and take away some saturation ..
keep going at it, practice makes perfect.