Re: First post. Comments please!
I can't help much with advice, I'm in the learning stages as well. You made a remarkable improvement. Your client will be pleased. As you mentioned, the untrained eye will not see what you perceive as flaws, especially if they do not see the "before" version.
The only nitpiks I could add is in posing. Bring her nose toward you just a bit, you don't want the nose to break the eye. Also, have you ever used a reflector as opposed to flash? I love natural lighting. In regard to the post production work, I'd like to see more saturation in the background, (nice view btw). Some feel this might take away from your subject, but I believe if you are going to show it, show it well.