Second shot, please critique

[DSutherland]

So far this is my second fashion retouch for practicing. What do you guys think?...the hair was a nightmare....anyone have any great techniques at fixing hair like the situation in this image?

large version can be viewed >here<

[amica999]

Uh, the hair on the face has a very, very harsh line...

[DSutherland]

Originally Posted by amica999

Uh, the hair on the face has a very, very harsh line...

haha your right, I'll fix that...I guess I was so focused on just "fixing" the hair that I over fixed it.

[DSutherland]

Line is fixed...I brought back the original hairline, looks allot better.
Thanks...I changed the link on the original post to go to the new version.

[nowheremanphoto]

Your hair-line still looks really unnatural. It looks unnaturally wavy and looks like you used a feathered brush to do it. She has straight hair, so the line should be a nice smooth curve across her cheek.

Less of a problem, but still distracting is the unnatural look to her skin and odd color on her lips. Her skin looks plastic-smooth now. The make-up artist did a fantastic job of having smooth skin. Your sharpening on top of it looks really unnatural. Her skin also has an unnatural red glow that I'm not digging.

Honestly, in my opinion the original is a much better photo. Has that already been retouched?

[DSutherland]

Thanks for your feedback, to be honest, I was having allot of difficulties with that hairline.
I didn't do any sharpening on the skin, the model has a really hairy face though (can't see it in this low res version) so maybe the look came from removing the hair.
I'll see what I can do to fix it, thanks for your input. This is really only my second attempt at this style so feedback is important.

[DSutherland]

Okay, so here's the changes, I took everyone's advice and I think that it made a big improvement. That hairline is really hard to work with, does anyone have any good techniques for something like that?
What do you think of the changes?

new version <HERE>

[nowheremanphoto]

It's an improvement, but I think the problem is that it still looks too smooth down the broad side of her face. It seems that you decided to create a new hairline altogether instead of using the original hairline and just removing the distracting stray hairs. You've basically given her helmet hair here.

I think the moral of the story is not to remove every stray hair, just the ones that distract from the overall look of the hairline and pull your eye away from the features of the face.

This also brings up a perfect example of why having a hair-stylist on-set to correct these problems is HUGE for photographers.