Newbie from London 4 critique

[alberm]

Hi all,

My names Mark and just a quick note to say hello, im a product photographer shooting apparel for several well known websites and am based in Central London but obviously this doesn't use any creative juices.

Regularly have retouchers working with me on my personal projects and have learn't loads but im not a retoucher!! Would love some critique on my attempts

Attached an image to start

Thx & hope to read soon..

[alberm]

Open critique please? (my first post)

Hi all,

have worked on this snap as my first forum post, did not want to over process as i like the natural feel. Open to all suggestions and critique,

Thank you

[Repairman]

Re: Newbie from London 4 critique

For plausible results you have to consider the whole picture. Just a few quick points: changing the lighting on her face would also have affected the lighting of her clothing. How would she be illuminated in that fashion against the new lighter background? Try removing the concentric creases on her neck and remove the bump from her forehead. You removed a fold of material from her head wrap and left a dark line edge which is not required. It's hard to write our own brief as we tend to avoid the tough tasks a real client requests so get good at masking, try cleaning up some untidy details and then worry about dramatic effects. Keep plugging away and you'll get there.

[daygraphics]

Re: Newbie from London 4 critique

I am going to go with a quick assessment. The highlight on the left side of her neck seems too blown out for me - compared to the tones overall. I would darken that down a bit. Also, as mentioned - the crease lines in her neck jump right out at me.

[alberm]

Re: Newbie from London 4 critique

Thank u for the advice

[DaIllestBeast]

Re: Newbie from London 4 critique

Yeah I agree the left looks a bit overexposed, and I would brighten up the right eye a bit because it's too dark. I usually do it with a soft brush, white with the layer set to overlay. Brush opacity about 5-10 and flow at around 27... and just slowly build up that area until it's just bright enough to bring out her eyes.

[DaIllestBeast]

Re: Newbie from London 4 critique

Here I just tried it out real quick to give an example. You might have to play around with other adjustments but it's the main thing I noticed that was bugging me

[alberm]

Re: Newbie from London 4 critique

Thanks everyone for your advice, have attached my final plus one with a some split toning

[Repairman]

Re: Newbie from London 4 critique

Now, you're cooking

[Janet Petty]

Re: Newbie from London 4 critique

Now, you're cooking

I agree. Nicely done. There is one small part that bothers me; and that is the small area of light on her left cheek. Not that it is wrong, just that that little spot of light is distracting to my own eyes. I guess that the split lighting used tends to make me want to discount that there is that much spill over onto the cheek. I'm not making myself clear--guess I'd better shut up.

[daygraphics]

Re: Newbie from London 4 critique

I agree. Cooking with gas. Just a suggestion - to reiterate Janet, I would know down that highlight on the left cheek a bit. Makes it look almost like a swollen area. You might be able to accomplish simply by burning a bit and adjust color to be less magenta and closer to the area around it. Also... while I am being picky. Take out the neck crease lines in her neck more fully. But heh... you made dramatic differences from first post!

[shumicpi]

Re: Newbie from London 4 critique

Thanks everyone for your advice, have attached my final plus one with a some split toning

Finally you are heading towards the right path!